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[水漾〃婷 10]

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My Summer Vacation

Because of mass organization's reason lets me arrive Taipei Zoo once again. It is hot this day. We meet mass organization cadres of other schools. We reach the amphibious living beings library first. We see that a lot of living beings are such as frog's snake's turtle's lizard's. Will later reach penguin's library. Sees to many kind of penguins. It also has penguin's model. It is so cute. Finish arriving we had a meal noon. After this section of journey lets my impression profound reason is the elementary school freshman class goes has not gone to the zoo.

Next year will elevate three grades summer vacations hoping is usually

can study with the leisure must be able to balance. On the one hand accumulation ability, on the one hand lets the brain have the time to relax.

[k0185123 11]

在下第一次寫英文作文

請幫忙看哪裡有錯誤的地方 感激

My Summer Vacation

Because of mass organization's reason(這整個是副詞,不是名詞) lets me arrive Taipei Zoo once again. It is hot this day(我會用today). We meet(過去式才對) mass organization cadres of other schools. We reach the amphibious living beings(怎不用animal)library first. We see that a lot of living beings(creatures?)are such as frog's snake's turtle's lizard's(這是@@?). Will(We'll?) later(放在動詞後面?) reach penguin's library. Sees to(不懂)many kind of penguins. It also has penguin's model. It is so cute. Finish arriving(After we have finished arriving??其實這樣講也怪怪的..)we had a meal noon. After this section of journey lets my impression profound reason is the elementary school freshman class goes has not gone to the zoo(After是連接詞,怎麼只有一個句子?..然後我也不是很懂你寫的..這次旅遊讓我印象很深刻的原因是國一新生沒有去動物園@@?..The reason of the fact that this journey makes my impression profound is that the elementary school freshman class didn't go to the zoo.你參考看看= =..我不知是不是你的意思).

Next year will elevate three grades summer vacations hoping is usually

can study with the leisure must be able to balance. On the one hand accumulation ability, on the one hand lets the brain have the time to relax.

= =你最後一段很多怪怪的地方

動詞用的很怪 沒有主詞 沒有連接詞也沒有逗點

你再去多看一些文章吧

以上是我個人小小的看法與建議 請各位大大多多指教 我英文也沒有超好= = 只是想說幫忙一下而已...如果我有改錯請各位大大一定要幫忙一下呀 謝謝

[姓韓者 11]

漢文式英語=.=

沒法說什麼

[劉十九 10]

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