【英文】兩篇英文短文

[tw578 10]

這兩篇英文短文是我自己寫的，因為對自己的文法沒有自信，請大大為我''批閱''一下。

(一)

Mother's Day was coming.Chris was excited and he wanted to do something for his mom.He woke up early to decide what to do today. First,he mopped the floor.After his hard working, the ground looked cleaner.He was happy and more confident.He wanted to do more and better.Then he went to wash the dishes.Suddenly, he dropped the plate on the ground because he was thinking how happy would his mother be latter and did not focus on it. Now his

mother is angry with him.

(二)

Jenny is a hardworking student and she wanted to speak English well.She studied English hard and listened the English program every day.She sometimes also has conversations with foreigners.She improved her English a lots.Now she can speak English better.

[Esther Chang 10]

我英文也不太好

但我覺得第一篇有一句改成

He felt happier and became more confident. 好像也不錯

至於第二篇

用fluently也許不錯(well那裏)

She sometimes communicates with foreigners automatically.

再來用a lot 不用a lots

基本上這樣吧!

[liltwnboiz 10]

(一)

Chris was excited because Mother's Day was coming. He wanted to do something for his mom. He woke up early to decide what to do today. First, he mopped the floor. Having worked hard for a long time , he found the floor cleaner. He was happy and confident. However, he wanted to do more and better. Then he went to do the dishes. Suddenly, he dropped a plate on the ground because he was thinking how happy his mother would be latter and did not focus on his work. Now his mother would certainly be angry with him.

1. 英文作文標點符號後面一定要空一格

2. ground 是指在戶外的地, floor才是室內

3. hard working 不是名詞是形容詞

4. 連接詞和轉折語似乎不夠多

5. do the dishes 是慣用語

[Sunriz 11]

我覺得..您的文章有點'' 流水帳 ''

Then he went to do the dishes 怪怪

[劉十九 10]

請樓主注意，本版請盡量不要發表批閱文章之類的文章。

因本版為學術性問題專版，若有英文文法或相關用法的疑問請單獨提出。

再者，若欲發表英文作文or文章批閱性文章請發表至外語版或許較適合。