詩人

[kenlee7874 10]

詩人

是一群絢爛的魔術師

不對

更正確的來說

是 巧手的裁縫師

把一句句 七彩的布

吃進去 精練 消化後吐出

拼湊出一件件美麗的織品

讓歷史穿上

連結到下一個未來

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各位砍吧...!!

多給我些指教~!

多謝!!!

[姓韓者 11]

mate......

you are just decribing the nature of a "poet"... :-/

and it's quite biased...

only one basic poetic technique, metaphor, is used in the poem

but it lacks the affinity that makes me want to probe into your thought

or, maybe you have no deeper ideas contained in the poem which could be discovered by us

[g21011g 10]

you have no deeper ideas contained in the poem which could be discovered by us

這篇只需要這句中肯的評論就夠了。

[cj2340 10]

如果此詩此句放入散文中將會是好的句子

但如果要當它為詩

它便太直接,缺乏含蓄

學長說: 新手的大忌:詞句表達得太白(我就常犯這大忌XD)

[danyuchn 10]

如果此詩此句放入散文中將會是好的句子

但如果要當它為詩

它便太直接,缺乏含蓄

學長說: 新手的大忌:詞句表達得太白(我就常犯這大忌XD)

Exactly.

But could u find out the key word vernacularizing (an awful word from YAHOO dictionary :Q) the whole poem ?

[kenlee7874 10]

英文.....看的我好吃力阿> <

謝謝各位的建議拉~~

我會好好改進的~

還望其他更多的各方高手繼續砍他~~!

或給些建議 謝謝!!

[cj2340 10]

Exactly.

But could u find out the key word vernacularizing (an awful word from YAHOO dictionary :Q) the whole poem ?

Frankly, I think the whole poem is vernacular. : P

[cj2340 10]

Exactly.

But could u find out the key word vernacularizing (an awful word from YAHOO dictionary :Q) the whole poem ?

by the way, your question supposes to be

"But could u find out the key word that vernacularizes the whole poem"

恕我妄言XD